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Re: For Best Results
Thanks very much for the feedback. I guess you win some and lose some haha. I will try to learn from this failure and write something better next time. This ...
Jan 31, 2010 -
Re: For Best Results
Fresh blood On a new page. Reading life's lines Before they are written. Every word Stands to conceal Thoughts of the free mind. Resounding thoughts through corridors of fine brickwork, ...
Jan 30, 2010 -
Re: picture of an old cowboy dying in the city
Very great writing! I actually liked how you emphasized the dust by repeating it. This poem gave a very strong image of the cowboy and the plains. However, it did ...
Jan 30, 2010 -
Re: Death of an Athiest, and Death of a Thiest
It's clearly saying that since an atheist doesn't believe in a deity, they are friendless nobodies that never accomplished anything in life and are going to have an equally unimportant ...
Jan 27, 2010 -
Re: Eulogy
Thank you very much Via and June. Both for the read and the suggestions. I'm learning more and more as I go about structuring my work, so the feedback helps ...
Jan 21, 2010 -
Re: Eulogy
Look to the moon. On a night where the clouds appear as a painting, Captured in a still frame. When your breath is the only movement, And the once furious ...
Jan 21, 2010 -
Re: The Pillars of Creation
Thank you for reading. I really liked your interpretation :). Punctuation in poetry has been something I've been needing to get a little better at.
Jan 6, 2010 -
Re: The Pillars of Creation
Thanks for the input universe. I'm glad my first impression on the site was a good one haha. I should be finishing up my latest one in the next few ...
Jan 4, 2010 -
Re: The Pillars of Creation
Tonight I shot for the stars, And missed. Leaving myself stranded in the depths of space, Unable to return to where I was before. The comfort of lies, The burden ...
Jan 4, 2010
